Swathed in Darkness -------------------------------------------
My everlasting sorrow seems so close to its peak
It reflects the words of terror that I cannot speak
Although I seldom feel close to happiness' grasp
I lose all my joy in disappointment’s clasp
My actions, propelled by regret, I cannot explain
They could have been spoken, yet only in vain
Whilst I lay dying, my wounds washed up by the rain
My heart feels tied up as in a chain
My bleary tears no longer seem to affect you now
As you suddenly lost all trust in our vow
You think I swagger as if seeking attention
Thinking I'm nothing but an act of pretension
I now invoke your precious being
I prey whilst you laugh without forgiveness
You've punctured my heart by barely seeing
How my seraph's swathed in darkness
Bam. That ending right there. I've been through that so many times recently. Especially with losing a best friend of 11 years. Just when I needed them more then ever, they disappeared, and I realized too late they were never there to begin with.
I love it, I really do. You did a great play on words during the whole thing, I felt my little black heart getting tuged at, haha. The only thing you might want to change in it is,
"How my seraph's swathed in darkness."
I think you can replace it with something better then that, something that cleans and seals the poem, but I can't really think of something that would. Great job again, hope to see more by you!
Submission Name: Swathed in Darkness
