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Swathed in Darkness


Author: xmichellex
ASL Info:    16/f/Canada
Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 5 /6 /9
Words: 150
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Swathed in Darkness



My everlasting sorrow seems so close to its peak
It reflects the words of terror that I cannot speak
Although I seldom feel close to happiness' grasp
I lose all my joy in disappointment’s clasp

My actions, propelled by regret, I cannot explain
They could have been spoken, yet only in vain
Whilst I lay dying, my wounds washed up by the rain
My heart feels tied up as in a chain

My bleary tears no longer seem to affect you now
As you suddenly lost all trust in our vow
You think I swagger as if seeking attention
Thinking I'm nothing but an act of pretension

I now invoke your precious being
I prey whilst you laugh without forgiveness
You've punctured my heart by barely seeing
How my seraph's swathed in darkness

Now that I need you the most, I’ve lost it all





Submitted on 2006-08-16 22:24:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "Now that i need you most, i've lost it all"

Bam. That ending right there. I've been through that so many times recently. Especially with losing a best friend of 11 years. Just when I needed them more then ever, they disappeared, and I realized too late they were never there to begin with.

BCute<3
| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  I love it, I really do. You did a great play on words during the whole thing, I felt my little black heart getting tuged at, haha. The only thing you might want to change in it is,

"How my seraph's swathed in darkness."

I think you can replace it with something better then that, something that cleans and seals the poem, but I can't really think of something that would. Great job again, hope to see more by you!
| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by Shadow_Mirror | [ Reply to This ]


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