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    dots Submission Name: ** Byedots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 651
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 499



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    dots** Byedots
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    Your not there
    When I need you
    I can't reach to you
    Or cry on your shoulder
    Your not the wall I need
    But a pile of bricks
    Waiting for me to build you up
    Repair you, wait on you
    But I can't, I won't
    I need repairs done too
    Wounds needed healing
    And a heart sewn together
    But you want me to do the work
    Help you up and keep you here
    It's not all about you
    Forget it
    Bye




    Submitted on 2006-08-17 10:54:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The comparison to a pile of bricks is good,
    i like the line " and a heart sewn together "
    The simple name is put to test well in this poem, i can relate to it, its good , i like it well done :-}

    kate
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by Musicloverxx | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really awesome. I was in a relation ship somewhat like that awhile back. THe person just keeps pulling and pulling and then you dont have anything left. I liked it. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by Sarah J | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, why asks BCute has no one commented on this piece. I don't know. (Sorry I'm referring to myself in the third person.) I enjoyed this piece because this is how I feel about a lot of people in my life right now. I liked that instead of being your fortress, they're a pile of bricks always expecting you to build them up. *Sighs* Good write.

    BCute<3

    Don't feel the need to comment on my work I'm trying to get to +30 I'd taken a leave from the site for a while and now I'm back to get my reciprocation up. So, don't feel like you have to comment back. I'm just doing everyone a favor. Thanks for the read!
    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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