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    dots Submission Name: Unforgivabledots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       This is about this chik anmed Haley who pretty much stole my bf away 4rm me by lying to him & shit like that. And now she stole my best friend who is like my sister, cuz we arn't allowed 2 c or talk 2 eachother 4 a wile since we ran away together.She's also trying to steal another 1 of my best friends since we cant hang out nemore either. So i'm really pissed off now, so tell me wut ya think


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    dotsUnforgivabledots
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    I'm losing everyone i love and care about,
    She's stealing them from me and it makes me shout.
    I'm gunna get her back for all she's done,
    And in this never ending battle i will have finally won.

    First she took my boyfriend which made me cut,
    She lied to him and acted like a dirty little slut.
    Then she took someone who is like a sister to me,
    So now in my dreams i kill her with glee.

    I kill everyone she loves and cares about,
    And tear them from the inside out.
    I make her watch me kill them all,
    And leave her there to take the fall.

    Maybe then she'll realize she cannot win,
    And this whole time on my face there will be a grin.
    But then i wake and realize it was just a dream,
    So tomarrows dream will be more extreme.




    Submitted on 2006-08-17 13:52:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay listen ya dumb bi/tch! I didn't steal anyone away from you! You broke up with Mike numerous times, and the last time you said you hated him never wanted to get back together with him and I was there to pick up the pieces of the heart YOU shattered! Star has been my friend 13 years fu/cking longer than yours! So if anyone is "stealing" her away its you stealing her from me! I'm not trying to steal Jenna either, she's cool and all but we hardly talk and she only came to my house to see Star! And its not my fault you can't see them, its your dumb as/s who ran away with them and fu/cked everything up! AND its not my fault people prefer me over a controlling raging bi/tch like you either. Maybe if you took the time to be a fu/cking better friend you wouldn't keep losing them! I know for a fact I never did anything to you to make you hate me, with the exception of telling you to die, but that was your fault to. You tried saying I was a dirty theiving little whore who was making your boyfriend cheat on you, and I didn't. Mike and I never even thought of eachother that way before you broke up with him. So don't blame me for your mistakes. Its not my fault your life is going down hill, okay? God, I don't even care enough to try and ruin your life. You can't blame anything on me. Just yourself for being the way you are. And you could never do what you talk about in this poem. Not even come close. I'm sorry that your life isn't going as planned. But its not my fault, I'm not trying in the least to make your life miserable. I see no point to it. I don't hate you enough to care. GET IT?! You tossed him out, I took him in. Star's been like a sister to me before she even knew you exsisted. I'm not stealing anything from you, I wouldn't want to. Sheesh.
    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by heartofxwinterx | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.......this is really good....and I take tis person used to be a good friend but now she isn't bc she takes those close to u away from u.....wow that doesn't sound much like a true friend at all...
    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by ajjax1705 | [ Reply to This ]


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