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Llittle lies

Author: LadyMerlina
ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58
Words: 48
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Part of me considers this unfinished.

Llittle lies

It is not easily told
How this path would unfold.

But it unraveled slowly,
spot of light by spot of light.

Putting each truth
In its own highlight.

Slowly pieceing them together
Becoming unblurred.

The little lies left
But the The big truth lingered.

Submitted on 2006-08-17 13:59:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Perhaps if you gave it a different title? It seems like that would give it more, yet if you settled to add more to finish it, perhaps explaining the largest truth would put your mind at ease...
| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]

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