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    dots Submission Name: Confusiondots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsConfusiondots
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    I'm so confused
    with the life I live
    one day its a burden
    the next its a gift
    ups and downs
    my soul's a blur
    with the mishaps
    and mistakes that occur
    joy in my heart
    depression at mind
    waiting and waiting
    in endless time
    Where shall I stay?
    When should I go?
    Confusion in wonder
    wanting to know
    the road to follow
    the right path to take
    to keep at the lies
    or admit I'm a fake
    Keep living a dream
    stubborn to reality
    or fess uo to THIS life
    and make a better...me.




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      you have taken every thought through my mind and made it into a beautiful piece. i guess i lie a lot to people about little things and i end up forgetting who i told what and i always question myself as to when im going to be straight about it and come out with it. i could go on and tell you hundreds of things that came to my mind when i read this. i havent been on for awhile or read any posts but im glad i caught this one. fabulous job. im sure alot of people can relate. +fav :)
    take care
    sam
    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is good. The rhyming, word choice. Everything. And I can understand and relate to this. Sometimes life can be great, and then other times it just sucks. I can tell by reading this that you are tired of being confused, and not knowing what is going to happen.

    This is written very well.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]


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