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    dots Submission Name: Untouchable, Unbreakabledots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 700
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    Bytes: 1041



    Description:
       REJECTION> ACCEPT IT


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    dotsUntouchable, Unbreakabledots
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    Hard, rock solid
    untouchable, unbreakable
    a barrier, a force, an inner soul
    dissappointment even
    written on your face
    hurt and confused
    questioning why
    you again open your mouth
    to speak....
    but silence is all that's heard
    foolish, astonished, in awe
    wanting, yearning something...
    so so untouchable, unbreakable
    you grasp your chest
    with both hands
    to keep it all in
    but it is written on your face
    you look up to the sky
    and mock the clouds in anger
    and again....you try
    but shot down once more
    you give up on "3rd time's charm"
    and your stage of denial
    finally surpasses
    and you accept defeat
    and bow your head
    in respect
    at the idol of the word
    in it's whole meaning...
    untouchable, unbreakable
    my soul,
    my heart,
    all of me
    untouchable
    in fact unbreakable





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