Tonight

Author: James Reyna Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 227 /166 /24 Words: 62

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 1315 Average Vote:    3.0000 Bytes: 392

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Tonight

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Where is sleep Flying above my head Like something I can't keep Here at my bed For tonight my dreams are cursed Thinking of you And how much I hurt Like a stone in my shoe With every step I take A little more pain And getting closer to break Tonight, tonight Thinking and asking, was today a mistake?

Submitted on 2006-08-17 14:56:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I feel this every night. Can't seem to get this guy's name out of mind. Haunts me. Well, I don't have any complaints on this one. Good job. I'd appreciate it if you'd check out my work. Katana

| Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

You seem to lose sight of your rhyme scheme a little bit by the end. But you have done a very good job of capturing a feeling that all of us can relate to at one point or another in our lives. I like the concept of the stone in the shoe. Nice work.

| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]

this is a very simple and sad piece but written well I enjoyed reading it.

| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]

good poem....im not good at writing commentds either but thers not much i can say rite away cuz rite know i cant think of anything but good poem and keep writing ~Amber~

| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]

Cool poem, great use of the stone, im never really very good at writing comments but i thought this was a great pieve of writing. well done, ~lou~

| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]

I liked this piece a lot. I'm not sure why no one really is on this site commenting. Hmmmm....BCute always tries though. I think my favorite lines in this were about the stone in the shoe hurting more and more with each step you take. Some kinds of love can be like that. I enjoyed reading this. BCute Don't feel the need to comment on my work I'm trying to get to +30 I'd taken a leave from the site for a while and now I'm back to get my reciprocation up. So, don't feel like you have to comment back. I'm just doing everyone a favor. Thanks for the read!

| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]

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