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Author: James Reyna
Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 227 /166 /24
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1315
Average Vote:    3.0000
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This was something I wrote last night and I really didn't go to sleep till about 3:30 or 4 in the morning.


Where is sleep
Flying above my head
Like something I can't keep
Here at my bed
For tonight my dreams are cursed
Thinking of you
And how much I hurt
Like a stone in my shoe
With every step I take
A little more pain
And getting closer to break
Tonight, tonight
Thinking and asking, was today a mistake?

Submitted on 2006-08-17 14:56:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I feel this every night. Can't seem to get this guy's name out of mind. Haunts me. Well, I don't have any complaints on this one. Good job. I'd appreciate it if you'd check out my work.
| Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  You seem to lose sight of your rhyme scheme a little bit by the end. But you have done a very good job of capturing a feeling that all of us can relate to at one point or another in our lives. I like the concept of the stone in the shoe. Nice work.
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very simple and sad piece but written well I enjoyed reading it.

| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  good not good at writing commentds either but thers not much i can say rite away cuz rite know i cant think of anything but good poem and keep writing

| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]
  Cool poem, great use of the stone, im never really very good at writing comments but i thought this was a great pieve of writing. well done, ~lou~
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this piece a lot. I'm not sure why no one really is on this site commenting. Hmmmm....BCute always tries though. I think my favorite lines in this were about the stone in the shoe hurting more and more with each step you take. Some kinds of love can be like that. I enjoyed reading this.


Don't feel the need to comment on my work I'm trying to get to +30 I'd taken a leave from the site for a while and now I'm back to get my reciprocation up. So, don't feel like you have to comment back. I'm just doing everyone a favor. Thanks for the read!
| Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]

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