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    dots Submission Name: Lost the fight...Lost the battle.. WON the War!dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This again I wrote on the 19th of Oct of 2003. I was home.. I was back where should have been for the three months I left ... those three months were hell but as you can see from the title I won the war and thats all that counts..


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    dotsLost the fight...Lost the battle.. WON the War!dots
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    The fight is over
    The battle has passed
    I'm back home now
    I'm back in my bed
    With those lovely birds
    Whom sing those song when I awake
    to leave for school
    And the same trees
    Still stand strong in their place
    For I have over come
    The war
    Beat the battle
    And did my best in the fight
    I went through hell
    I cried and still do
    Tears...
    Of happiness
    Of sadness
    Still find their own of streaking my make-up down my face
    And the fears still find little ounces of doubt I have
    Nevertheless I am home
    And I have won the war!




    Submitted on 2006-08-17 19:28:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know your situation, but from reading that I get a pretty good idea, glad you made it back, well written piece, I can empathize with what you must have gone through to get back home, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]


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