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    dots Submission Name: Lost the fight...Lost the battle.. WON the War!dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This again I wrote on the 19th of Oct of 2003. I was home.. I was back where should have been for the three months I left ... those three months were hell but as you can see from the title I won the war and thats all that counts..

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    dotsLost the fight...Lost the battle.. WON the War!dots

    The fight is over
    The battle has passed
    I'm back home now
    I'm back in my bed
    With those lovely birds
    Whom sing those song when I awake
    to leave for school
    And the same trees
    Still stand strong in their place
    For I have over come
    The war
    Beat the battle
    And did my best in the fight
    I went through hell
    I cried and still do
    Of happiness
    Of sadness
    Still find their own of streaking my make-up down my face
    And the fears still find little ounces of doubt I have
    Nevertheless I am home
    And I have won the war!

    Submitted on 2006-08-17 19:28:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know your situation, but from reading that I get a pretty good idea, glad you made it back, well written piece, I can empathize with what you must have gone through to get back home, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]

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