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    dots Submission Name: The Way it isdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 608
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    Description:
       It seems as if I wrote part of this at one point and finished the rest of it. That why it takes the drasic change at the end but please leave comments...


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    dotsThe Way it isdots
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    What about tomorrow?
    What about Friday's?
    Will I come home to find
    I have been taken out of school
    Or find my room bear
    With white walls
    And brown cardboard boxes
    With my name written in black sharpie all over them
    The nightmear will start all over
    my eyes will flood with tears
    As my eye-liner stains my face
    Following the heavy tears down my cheeks
    The nightmears will not leave me be
    Or will the thought she may do it again
    And when he was not around
    To hold me
    I cried
    As I still do this day
    For tomorrow will never
    Be the same as today
    I may not be here tomorrow
    You may not see me
    For my Mother as taken me and my soul
    My hopes I had are gone
    My dreams I do not recall of
    I do not see what you see
    For I have not lived your life
    And you have not lived my life
    So before you judge me
    Remeber that!




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      Good poem, I'm just not too sure the ending works all that well with the rest of it, I don't mean to sound picky, I have read alot of your work and most of it has a good flow to it, this one flows good until the last 5 lines, I do like the meaning of those lines but not really with this poem, Keep writing I enjoy reading your works, I dealt with alot of issues when I was younger and still am just different issues now and my poetry has helped me alot as I am sure yours has helped you, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]


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