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    dots Submission Name: Cranium Candlesdots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Dystopia
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 93/94/41
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsCranium Candlesdots
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    The dancing display of shadows against
    my bedroom walls.
    My candle, lit, burning low.............
    Slowly down.
    Such as my mood...........slowly dieing.
    Lack of emotion now keeps me stable.
    If stable is what you would call it.......
    My breath......no more than a whisper,
    Calling out for something better......
    With every lung filled gasp......
    Heart filled up with poison!
    Mind so ever conchise!
    Shove the wick in my brain!
    Let it burn with the best.
    Denied that of simple.
    Complexity is always the issue.
    Hand me a tissue.........or maybe a gun.
    So I can blow it all away.




    Submitted on 2006-08-17 19:52:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Eeppp!!! i love it, youre an amazing author hun. keep it up, maybe one day ill see you in borders :]
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by FailureXX | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is sad....it's better then other suicide/depressed poetry. I like the comparison to a low burning candle that you made. It was really beautifully dark. If you need to talk or anything, PM me...


    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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