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    dots Submission Name: I am the handsdots
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    Author: Anarius
    ASL Info:    24/m/somewhere in Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 631/678/168
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI am the handsdots
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    I am the hands
    of a man
    not quite so captivated
    with material
    as others have become.
    But more entranced
    on words
    and clouds.
    I write his thoughts,
    saving them on paper.
    Keeping his past safe
    with black ink
    memories.

    I am the gentle hands
    of a man
    who is reaching out
    and teaching
    with his words
    that I write.
    His dreams of love
    and a world pure
    and selfless.
    He is innocent,
    and so vulnerable.

    I am the calloused hands
    of a man
    who has worked the fields
    of hate
    and remorse.
    He is scorned
    for dreaming,
    he is hated
    for loving.
    But I still work for him
    willingly.

    I am the bloodied hands
    of a man
    beaten,
    for refusing to give up,
    for staying loyal
    to the truth
    that he knows is real.
    He uses me to grasp
    for love
    but we only find
    mud
    that we lie in.

    I am the cold hard hands
    of a man
    who sacrificed
    everything
    for the very people
    who sacrificed him
    for thirty pieces
    of something
    they did not need.




    Submitted on 2006-08-17 21:23:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, I love it.

    Touching, beautiful, honest, and all around wonderful.

    I hope I'm not just being foolish seeing the religious aspect of it. If it is a sort of ode to Jesus Christ, you disguised it very well. No, I won't say disguised, you did it very originally. I haven't read anything quite like this. You did a marvelous job.

    My favorite part...

    He uses me to grasp
    for love
    but we only find
    mud
    that we lie in.
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. I never got till the end you were talking about some biblical characters. This applies today to men and women around the world. And I like how you used the way there hands looked to describe them. That to me was awesome.

    I like the "not so captivated hands" the best. Wording to me was best there.
    Overall this write is excellent and I really like it. I'm adding it to my favorites.
    Keep writing
    Pursuitoflife
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Pursuitoflife | [ Reply to This ]


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