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    dots Submission Name: Lost without youdots

    Author: sheaa2007
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 3/0/4
    Words: 118
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    dotsLost without youdots

    Trembling inside wondering where it is you may be hiding.Pacing through and through and yet there is no sign of you.I cry and plead now i am ultimately on  my hands and knees.Pleading to see you to remove the dark shield before me,to eventually see the glowing white peacful path I've been waiting for just that look of your eyes to dry away the tears of mine, and that caring hand of yours to lift me from the ground and to begin a new journey with no problems, no lies to a new world in disguise, where I will find joy and happiness just because of the fact you will be there through it all.

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