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    dots Submission Name: Blissful Beautydots
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    Author: xmichellex
    ASL Info:    16/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 5/6/9
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsBlissful Beautydots
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    Oh resplendent blissful beauty
    As I admire your impudent grace
    I am a slave to your senseless hypocrisy
    And a prisoner to your warm embrace

    How such pure gorgeousness
    Could end up being so evil
    And how such selfishness
    Could become a sin so brutal

    Behind your innocent aesthetic face
    Lay the most unholy lies
    A beautiful young madden in disgrace
    Is a vicious trap in disguise




    Submitted on 2006-08-17 22:26:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A lot of your poems truely do have a religious theme. I'll have to get the word out about your peoms. I know a few people on here that will drink them right up! If they listen to the poor old ramblings of BCute that is. Who knows.

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    | Posted on 2006-08-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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