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    dots Submission Name: Open River. Small Canoe.dots

    Author: Mykquillion
    ASL Info:    20/M/NEB
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 109/124/41
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Haiku/
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    dotsOpen River. Small Canoe.dots

    Down the stream I flow,
    Many days ahead for me;
    Alone as always.

    Submitted on 2006-08-18 08:41:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very small item. It gave me no direction to think about. It also had no rhyme and was a little bit short on words.

    You should try to limit/make your poetry into stanzas. The stanzas can be/ should be four lines in length. This is the normal stanza length.

    This item made me feel as if there was no subject. I also don't know anything about your poetry writing in the past. Have all of your poems been this length? Please refer me to a poem of yours that has more length to it.

    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]
      US Glen obviously has no idea what a haiku is. The beauty of this is the simplicity. You seem to have a talent for this style of poetry. It is very seldom that I am moved by a haiku, or even visualize anything. This has done both. Nice write.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very sad. Big river, yet all alone, with no one to be there. You did a good job in expressing what it feels like. I liked it.

    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]

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