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    dots Submission Name: Roller Coasterdots

    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       I've had a long hard year...but even with everthing I'm still not ready to give up...on anything

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    dotsRoller Coasterdots

    Life is like a roller coaster
    With all it's ups and downs
    My life seems to be on fast speed
    Switchin directions in a instant
    Losing friends, gaining family
    Love and hate directed to one place
    My heart is there yet I am here
    Emotions going up and down
    I've lost control
    Just going a long for the ride
    But even with all the complications
    When this coaster starts to slow down
    I throw the man a ticket
    And tell him to keep the excitment comin

    Submitted on 2006-08-19 01:14:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i have to agree with the first comment. very well done.
    i wasnt expecting that ending at all.
    'keep it comin',
    | Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really cool, I especially love the part how your just like, "Keep it comin'" lol, very cool. I love this poem for it's hopefullness and almost whimsy.

    Great job,

    | Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]

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