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    dots Submission Name: The Clockdots

    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       My son was doing a project a couple of months ago for one of his classes and he had to 'interview' me and ask me some questions. The final question on his survey asked, "If your parent(s) could wish for one thing that would make their lives easier, what would it be?"

    My answer was, "A clock that magically created 48 hours in every day...so that perhaps we would finally have the time to do everything that needs to be done."

    This poem kind of touches upon that subject...wishing that time could at least stand still a little bit to give me a fighting chance to catch up...

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    dotsThe Clockdots

    I have forgotten to wind the clock again
    The weights hang heavy and low upon their chains
    The swing of the pendulum stilled
    It stands in stately grace
    With hands reaching forever upward
    Permanently stopped at three minutes of one
    When did the clock stop ticking?
    Hours ago? Days? Weeks?
    Time merges so swiftly into infinity
    That it is all a blur to me anyway
    The Westminster chimes of each quarter hour
    Blending into background noise
    And the resounding gong counting yet another 60 minutes passed
    Unheard against the din of the day
    It seems to be a photograph
    Of time standing still
    And because I wish that it would
    For just a moment
    I leave the clock unwound
    So that each day
    At three minutes of one
    I may pause for just that second in time
    And breathe

    Submitted on 2004-05-20 06:37:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Just made my recent favorites list! Clearly masterful in style, seemless in thought. At least to myself. Read it twice to pull more out of the undertones, less the points made. Which is a rarity for submissions typically read at this site. Was this a first draft or something settled upon? Im curious. The tie in of your description had me thinking even more as to the direction you subsequently decided to take. Which I thoroughly liked. Definately look forward to having enough time to go through the rest of your collection.
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by Interpolation | [ Reply to This ]

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