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    dots Submission Name: i want you to hold medots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1260



    Description:
       this is about longing for something you know you can never have again...no matter what you do, or what you say, it's lost and you're left with nothing but the memories and thoughts of what it was like to be loved.

    dedicated to anyone who's ever loved someone who didn't love them back.


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    dotsi want you to hold medots
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    verse 1:
    i'm lying here in bed alone
    it's been so long since i
    felt your arms around me
    i wish to feel your skin
    upon my own, to keep me warm
    i need you here

    chorus:
    i want you to hold me
    in your arms baby
    i've forgotten what it's like
    to be loved, help me
    hold me like you used to
    kiss me like i want you to
    baby please come back to me

    verse 2:
    i'm looking at our old pictures
    oh, has it been that long
    since i was beside you
    i wish you would come back
    believe me when i say that i
    really miss you

    chorus

    verse 3:
    i'm missing the way you loved me
    when i felt like i was
    the only one for you
    i want you to hold me
    just like the way you did before
    hold me once more

    chorusx2

    coda:
    i'm lying here in bed along
    it's been so long since i
    felt your arms around me
    i want you to hold me
    in your arms baby
    hold me like you used to
    kiss me like i want you to
    just hold me once more






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      I liek this. I think it would make a great song. Are you in a band or something because I tihnk that these would be awesome with instruments and everything. I think it was very deep and moving, and I think a lot of people could relate, which is what music os. To connect the singer/ songwriter/ musicina to the people listening. Good job an I hope you continue to write beautful songs.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      I think if you sing this to a good beat, I bet this'll be an awesome song. I like the words because it describes the pain you get when you think they were "the one" but they break your heart.

    I know exactly how you feel. You give them all your trust and your heart, but than they leave. The longing to want to be with that person again is a really big longing. When you look at pictures or listen to "your song", it makes you think about everything you did together.

    Good Job,
    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-09-01 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]


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