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    dots Submission Name: Stunteddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStunteddots
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    We live like emus
    penned in spaces too small
    bound by our wounded souls
    scarred by incurable sadness
    unable to soar on our stunted wings.




    Submitted on 2004-05-20 07:48:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Draw in a pixie face or two...and then a magical battle, and you'll have a bestselling novel. Darn, I thought this was difficult!
    | Posted on 2004-05-21 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      At first I was like "Who is Emus?"
    LOL@myself. I think you've done well in the first three lines. I don't know about the line incurable sadness. Maybe you could rephrase. Just a thought. I hope I don't upset you.
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      for I am stunded..., i don't get it........lol...,
    i read it....., it is me, not you.
    I found your po'em different, that is for sure.
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      That's quite depressing, isn't it? I can soar.. I'm soaring now. We choose whether or not the good stuff happens; we make our own reality.

    I do like this.. to begin with I was like "emus? wtf?!" But all was explained...This is unique, and will stay that way. Even if it's only because no-one else is crazy enough to think of that :P
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, you know, I love all the little short poems you write, I could use them all as quotes to live by. You have some amazing thoughts And the best thing they are true, and they dwell in one's mind like sugar plums when they sleep. I love this! Excellent job!
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      Blunt, and bludgeoned. Liked it. Leaves me feeling a little helpless being subjected as a hapless emu. Maybe it's because I see myself as a mountain goat? Or maybe for the fact my wings were clipped long ago, and defying nature they've grown back. Always liked your work cuddledumplin, you have a knack for playing upon different topics and feelings, leaving people guessing on what direction you might take next.
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by Interpolation | [ Reply to This ]
      very cute and good. Not my favorite, but you really do have a talent for stating profound ideas without saying much, especially with your womderful analogies... I love emus... =^..^= it's so random, I love it. This could be any bird, really, but by making it an exotic, less-known bird it has a lot more emphasis. Great job, I was wondering where you'd got to =^..^= luv your new av ~Coranna
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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