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Love & life


Author: elseibi
ASL Info:    20/f/uk
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Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Love & life



I lost you once but still you keep me near,
I turned you away, still you ask me back,
I shut you out, you opened up to me,
I hid my thoughts, you admitted your feelings.

When I cried, you made me smile,
When I was lonely, you stayed with me
When I tried to speak my feelings, you helped me,
When i finally admitted i loved you, you made me feel happier than i knew possible.

You are my life, you are my love, you are my everything.




Submitted on 2006-08-19 19:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is remarkable in its innocence and devotion! It is a lovely read, and has a "heart melting" ending!!!
| Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  AAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!! How cute!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Dead_inside | [ Reply to This ]
  It's so sweet. I like it a lot. It's so true. When you find that special someone it just all feels so right. Like nothing can go wrong. They help you through everything. They stay with you through the good and the bad.
Katana
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  Again, expressed with a pure innocence of the feeling of love. Very meaningful and very good indeed.

Frank.
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Thanks for the comment!

I loved it! Wow, he seems really sweet. It sounds like love, a lot of love. It's a great poem, keep on writing!

~*~ Lisa ~*~
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]
  How cute! I rrrreeaaalllllyyyy liked it! :) It was sweet. Cuteness :)
-Missy
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
  As sweet as this was, I felt that the format needed improvement. I am mainly pointing towards the second last line, which read tooo long as compared to the others. You talked about a brilliant relationship, which is difficult to find. I didn't find this different from some other things I have read on this site, but I must commend you for your noted simplicity while writing about this topic. A strong message, well done.


Abbas
| Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  Aw! Its nice to know there are some good guys in the world! I needed to be reassured xD

Great poem!

Maddy <3
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by welshgirlmaddy | [ Reply to This ]


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