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    dots Submission Name: Shallow Depthsdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1137
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 665



    Description:
       I don't know where this came from, but I feel like crap right now, and this came out. Talk about subconscious writings...hehehehe


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    dotsShallow Depthsdots
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    Let's take a look,
    shall we dears,
    at the girl with her friends,
    and all her hidden fears.

    Look at her smile,
    such traces of sad,
    Oh, and those brows
    that crease when she's mad.

    Next to her fingers,
    they clench with anxiety,
    and pressure remains,
    saying she flunks in society.

    Do you see the tension
    that lurks in her stance?
    I wonder if she hungers
    for just another chance.

    So do you see lovelies,
    don't judge her too hard,
    She's falling apart on the inside,
    cracking and marred.




    Submitted on 2006-08-19 23:39:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this, if you look at my poems youll see i settle with, dark, angst and romance..dont try to do more than 5 genres at once, what elly said is ok advice..what i say is better:

    write from your heart, then write it again to make snese, your doing well, i only comment on dark poems, and poems of angst and romance gone wrong, youll find a lot of people are like that, i find i cannot write happy poems
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]
      just like all the others of yours ive read ths is exelant. im faving this one. it reminds me of me, well how i used to be, im getting back together with myself. a lot of super glue was needed.

    this made me smile
    how wierd is that?
    i never smile.

    loves ya

    Elly
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]


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