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    dots Submission Name: Hourglassdots
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    Author: Master Bates
    ASL Info:    22/M/Ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 114/140/68
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 991
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1202



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    dotsHourglassdots
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    I long for days like this
    The softest gift of life
    Treasure it for its pure
    Lay your heart in my soul
    Let your tender whispers
    Heal my calloused hands

    A caustic soul
    Tearing away their flesh
    Inner light flickers and dies
    Facade the day with shades of rue and fire
    The brightest star burns out my eyes

    The answers I seek
    Escape me
    Blood lipped flowers enshrine my faith
    And tonight I lay
    Without you
    The bed chamber, empty and scarred

    How can I live without you
    God, you seem so perfect
    This day, so full of light
    We deserve more than this
    Strong souls to carry on

    Shatter the hourglass
    Let eternity surround us
    A veil of truth
    Covering deceit
    I feel your pins in my eyes

    How can I live without you
    God, you seem so perfect
    The answers I seek
    Have found me
    We deserve more than this
    Our truth hiding amongst lies
    I need you with me
    Follow me now
    Come take me away
    Take me away
    Before the sunlight fades




    Submitted on 2006-08-20 00:12:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      really great lyrics. keep up the good work , and ill check out your other pieces.
    | Posted on 2006-11-26 00:00:00 | by loco_baby92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yo Bates,
    It has been a long time since I have read one of your pieces. Then again it has been awhile since I last got on the site. Since the last time I read one of your poems you have grown and matured. You are perfecting your form in a way that it takes many writers a lifetime to do. I love this piece and I am glad I get to see your growing efforts and your maturing form.


    Take care,
    Mike
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      These are great lyrics!

    Yea, it describes all your feelings. I could tell you feel longing and pain.
    This is really good. You should keep writing!

    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont usually pay much attention to the lyrics submitted on here (tut tut). but this is fantastic. it has a 'yearning' about it.

    and i love these lines -

    'Shatter the hourglass
    Let eternity surround us'

    very nice work.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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