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    dots Submission Name: Adjusting The Lensdots

    Author: azure_warrior
    ASL Info:    42 /m/ in my mind.
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 44/43/32
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is based somewhat on 2 photographs of a rural scene of the same dirt road. One old and one new photo.
    And the poem is also loosely based on the work of Marc Chagall (and surrealism generally)....
    I hate boring poems.

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    dotsAdjusting The Lensdots

    dusty blue roar rubber,
    squeal trax
    enveloped by a familiar trail.
    green grass of 1923
    black and white.
    Same as the trail
    exactly the same in 1973
    but colored.
    the tan brown twin ponies
    in motion.
    Rocket dreams,
    spurting, flying singing
    rubbing cosmic dust to heat....
    here, there and yet
    nearly erased again.
    Against all reason.
    All this!
    Splattered, reach out
    Marc Chagall's wildwork...
    why so short
    to reach you?
    and can't. Why so long?
    Why so final?
    Why impermanence?
    Can truth exist apart from time?
    grab, joy, reach, totter, blackness
    dirt, brick, particles, cling, grave rock
    letters, lines, borders dimming...
    Reach out,
    yell, holler, plead.
    So much,
    And a hell of a lot more.

    Submitted on 2006-08-20 03:33:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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