Description: This is about my friend...what used to be my best friend. I just want people to know that sometimes if you get too caught up in being fake, you lose yourself.
Fake -------------------------------------------
You think if you just put on a disguise
People won’t see who you truly are
I know I memorize
Who you were before
I don’t know why you’re doing this
Why hide your personality?
Who you were, I truly miss
Why not show your individuality
I remember you as my best friend
How you didn’t care what people thought of you
I remember all the good times we used to spend
We always shared what we always knew
Your disguise isn’t working
Everybody knew about it
They just look at you, smirking
Why don’t you just quit?
Quit all the hiding
Quit all the lying
I have been abiding
Why have you been denying?
I can’t seem to save you
You were too caught up being fake
Now I bid adieu
I think you made a big mistake…
(Insert appreciative whistle here.)
I know exactly how that feels, but I have NEVER seen anyone write it like that. I'm surprised you don't think you've got much poetry ability (to take your journal to heart); you could do crazy stuff if you put your mind to it.
"Fake", very nice. Apparently its a common occurence especially in teens who are often still seeking their own identy as well as some "new" acceptance. Everyone sees it in others, few see it in themselves. Call it a mental block.
Later, you'll notice it in adults where it sometimes gets really ugly, but mostly its just a coping mechanism. Your message is a good one.
This was very sad. I have a couple friends myself who do the same thing now. I wish they would come back to being how they were before, but I know that, that won't even happen. Okay, getting back to the poem, I liked it a lot. Your very good at describing how it feels to have this happen to you. Nice work.
i think the first two stanzas were the best. i was very impressed by ur rhyming vocabulary. i can barely imagine me trying to rhyme like that when i was thirteen. good job. welcome to elite
I really like this piece , it makes me think of a certain person in my life that has basically done the same thing, very well written and easy to understand, keep writing, Dean
Oh you are so right I remember when you-know-who use to be normal and when she hung out with us. I'm ashamed to call her my sister now and you know what I was right she is in denial and the way she changes herself to fit in just shoves her even farther away.
Now about the poem, I only have two words for it: "Luv It!" Wow you are a way better writer then me and lol do not contradict me. *Sigh* this poem is so good and in a sense it's sad too. Kinda makes me wanna cry, remembering all those good old memories. Lol anyways awesome poem and keep it up gurl, I'm always here rooting for you.
Submission Name: Fake
