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Yesterday's Smile

Author: Liv2LoveThePain
ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527 /1515 /256
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Nostalgia
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Yesterday's Smile

Those days are no more.
We've built death in dreams.
Tomorrow was taken
from what it once seemed.

Then windows, like doors,
closed on a whim.
Silence is cracking
to pieces of him.
Can't say I miss it,
yesterday's smile.
Feelings of liars
echo for miles.

Lift up that camera.
Capture the grave.
Cold, unforgiving
photographs saved...

But none are of us.
Stick-figures in gray
are all I remember
of those moonlit days.
Developed too late,
then everything shook.
He pulled off my halo
with only a look.

Those days are no more.
We sent them away,
then brought death to life.
Now no good can stay.

Submitted on 2006-08-20 13:13:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Your so awesome. Amazing. I dont have time to say much but i loved this.

ill seeyou later.
| Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
  "Those days are no more.
We've built death in dreams.
Tomorrow was taken
from what it once seemed."

IT's so simply put; yet; it's just breathtaking. I absolutely love those lines! It's amazing sometimes that a write can sem so simple yet, you'd never come up with it; I still dont quite get that. This seems to contrast that last write of yours. I can only imagine why; especailly after talking to you :)

"Lift up that camera.
Capture the grave.
Cold, unforgiving
photographs saved..."

that was clever, I liked that! You made me smile! Shame on you!!tsk tsk, now what am I gonna do with myself, god damnit!

| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice. I thought to whole "we brought death to life" thing at the end was very good. Really enjoyed that one. Urgh, I think I've commented on so many people's stuff today that I'm running out of opinions for people. I have comment's block. Dammit.
I do, however, agree with a lot of what dismentled said, everything about this poem was simply put for such a complicated subject. It was near shocking in a way, just not that dramatic.
Sorry for the lame comment, I'm really tired, lol, peace...

| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  I Loved it, it has this flow that just like brings it together along with the exceptional way you have of descriptions! I am going to try and put this as a favorite if I can figure it out! but really good job now Id like to read more of your writings so Im off!Keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by carolspencer707 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very good and I shall add it to my fav's! How did such a poem come to ones mind? I think you have put most of mankinds thought back on track? I bet you look both ways when you get back into the water of life?
Anyway this was something everyone should read a clasic poem for the ages!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]

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