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You Can Trust In Me


Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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Okay I wrote this poem about two years ago. It's either about friendship or something more, take your pick. I think I may rewrite it...hmm...


You Can Trust In Me



When you are in doubt
And have nowhere to go
You can turn to me
And I'll be there for you.
If you have tears to shed
Or screams to unleash
Don't hesitate to call
I'll be there in a heartbeat.
You can trust in me.

We may not always be together,
Even if we are world's apart
I'll be there for you.
Just tell me your problems
I'll try my best to chase them all away
With me you will always be safe
No danger will; only go.
No hesitation for you
You can trust in me.




Submitted on 2006-08-20 14:29:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this because its got a feel with it i can defintely sympathize with and it has the same merciful attitude to it that i try to display to all.
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
  aww i loved this it reminds me of what i kept trying and trying to tell my ex but he was hardheaded anyway its a great write and has a very good flow keep up the good work

~ love Timely
| Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Oscura | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one...i know wat that feels like to want to do that with someone! It has a nice flow to it! good job!

Brittany
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't think there's any need to rewrite it - this poem is as close to perfect as i think possible. A beautiful poem with very good layout. ~lou~
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
  I quite like this piece

It has a really good rythmic flow!

Great job!

Maddy <3
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by welshgirlmaddy | [ Reply to This ]
  very good write, but one part didn't sound right. that line that say:
"No danger will; only go"
it doesn't make sense to me. maybe you could clear that up. but other than that, great job. keep writing...
</3 lisa
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
  i agree, there is no need to re-write this. (but do so if you think you should).
i like it as it is.
i get the feelin of wanting to embrace someone and protect them from the world. its a nice thought.
whirl**
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this one! its very caring and sweet. the rymings a little iffy but u got the message across...so props to u.
| Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]


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