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    dots Submission Name: titles and me suck!!dots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 745
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 769



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    dotstitles and me suck!!dots
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    I love you
    I've said it over and over again
    And unlike everyone else , you said the same thing to me

    But today

    Your packing all your bags
    getting your things together
    and your about to walk out the door

    Your the same girl that I slept beside ever since I knew what love is
    Same girl I kiss before i leave for the day
    ....
    your the reason I come back

    So what do i do know
    I got no reason to come back
    Do i die now?
    .....

    You just slammed the door
    and with that crushed my one chance to try and get you back
    I guess I should give you your picture back now
    cause here done...
    and so is my life.




    Submitted on 2006-08-20 17:19:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      in a few places where you put the word 'your', it should be 'you're'.
    that aside, this is great. you have portayed perfectly the feeling of your whole life walking out the door, that feeling of complete loss.
    very good and well written. i enjoyed it, though it made me feel sad.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry that suck it hurts alot bad you can get through anything. Great poem you never no what to do until you finally do it keep your head up
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by twinklebell69 | [ Reply to This ]
      A very moving poem, perfectly laid out. The piece flows very well while keeping the reader interested.
    Amazing, melancholy poem.

    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      I know exactly how you feel, well written poem, I can't give any advise because I am in the same situation, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]


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