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    dots Submission Name: Your Virusdots
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    Author: welshgirlmaddy
    ASL Info:    19/female/Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 32/31/22
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 725
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 384



    Description:
       VERY random. I cant sleep xD


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    dotsYour Virusdots
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    Internal core disfunction.
    The way you handle me.
    Why dont I just flee?

    Your virus is immortal.
    How can I stop this agonizing pain.
    I dont want to harm your tender skin.
    But when i see that grin....

    Maybe i should go.
    Leave you on the cold floor.
    Make you plead for more.
    Yeah, shut down your core.




    Submitted on 2006-08-20 18:23:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah,i get you blu =P

    thanks
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by welshgirlmaddy | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, thats definately different....I will have to think for a moment to decide if i really like it or if the originality of it is what struck me or both....

    pretty sure its both....once again, wow...its very deep without being Deep, if ya know what i mean....

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for the comments
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by welshgirlmaddy | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and poinent. I like this poem it conveyed feeling without over doing the emotion. Well done.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. It's definately different. I liked the second part of it the best.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by ChimeraNytemare | [ Reply to This ]


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