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    dots Submission Name: These Feelingsdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/381
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       uhh This dosen't do say much about how I feel.. Its hard for me to write how I feel sometimes and about certain things such as this I can never get it down on paper not the way I feel it.. but please comment I just wrote this like 30seconds ago :) thankx


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    dotsThese Feelingsdots

    Its the feeling I get when I walk into the place I call home
    But its not the right feeling
    Its the same kind of feeling when he walks in my room wanting something...
    Getting close to me...
    Its the feeling I get when he says things...
    That makes me shake my head in confusion
    As my hart...
    Stumbles into your stomach
    Its the feeling of being
    A pice of property...
    The feeling as if my body says more for me than my mind.
    Only wanting guys and Male Family Members to take me as me
    And not take me for the way I look...
    I feel I'm not conceeded
    Quiet the oppsite!
    I do not thrive on my looks...
    I do not feel as if I'm riding on the way I look to get me through this crazy place we call our world.
    But I feel others judge me before they know me...
    I feel that I've lost so much respect of others ...those whom I do not know but know me.
    I want to be loved ...
    I want to be liked
    I want to be envyed by few
    Most of all I want to feel wanted..
    At this point in my life..
    I feel
    Theres no escape for these feelings
    For the person who has caused them..
    Lives with me....
    And forever I will remeber ...
    And forever I will feel the pain I've felt from the Very Beginning

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      Man, very powerful feelings in there, I don't know what to say except hang in there, there will be someone out there that will love you for who you are, just don't let everything drag you down and destroy you, from what I gather from your writings you are a very intuitive young lady that knows what you want, now it's just a matter of getting it, it's out there, you just need to be patient, this was a good write, keep writing, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      It's amazing how you wrote this with so much feeling. This is a really good piece. It's meaningful and it lets people know how you really feel. There is always a person for somebody. All you gotta do is wait.
    There are a lot of feelings in just one piece. It makes it more interesting. I like how you wrote it and I don't think you really need to change anything. Good Job. I think this is a really great piece.

    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]
      omg this is beautiful
    and it really hits home for me
    not about the guys in family part but just for guys in general
    but anyways it's very amazing
    and you can really feel the emotion in it
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]

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