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    dots Submission Name: Don't wake medots

    Author: Zabriel
    ASL Info:    22/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 122/120/63
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1237
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       This a poem about nothing and everything all at once. It's not really inspired by anything specifically, but rather life in general. This is a poem about love, longing, and finding inner peace. Everything, and nothing. This was a rather spontaneous write, and may feel a bit strange but please just give me your honest reviews of it. I like it, but I want to see what everybody else thinks.

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    dotsDon't wake medots

    It's a beautiful thing
    Deep in the realm of Subconscia
    Far away from the waking world
    Sailing on the tranquil sea
    Never looking back to the shore
    Unbroken by man
    Silver cord
    Pulls me back
    Beckons me
    To the walking
    To the worrying
    Calls me home
    My inner soul cries
    Yearns to be set free
    Don't wake me just yet
    The dream is so nice

    Submitted on 2006-08-20 23:55:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that it is a good poem. It has emotion and passion. I like the part where you wrote
    "Far away from the waking world
    Sailing on the tranquil sea
    Never looking back to the shore
    It has really good imagry and description. Keep up the good work. I think that you have a good way of writing and you use words that make the reader think about it. Good job, Keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-12-23 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, everybody feels this way sometimes, caught up in the day to day mediocrity of life, sometimes we want to carry on dreaming and living in that realm of peace. i like your language here, like "silver cord" that's a good metaphor for what connects you to life.
    keep dreaming!!
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by freeangel | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah well its about sailing like you say you feel the tugging of your girl of course but then the journey quite enchanting might let you see another person....that is a little fortifying in the enthusiastic level and will pretty well much make you forget about this girl but well we will never figure ot out...at least what we really want, it is quite universal yet saying i dont know???? budy we are so much in love with the persons that will allow us to view them in our own dreams but...might very well offend them in real life......sorry an indication of my realistic apocalypse......concerning this moment im sorry.......
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by locutus | [ Reply to This ]

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