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    dots Submission Name: These Tearsdots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 684
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1649



    Description:
       this is a song i wrote in actually about 15-20 mins :O about how i'm feeling right now


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    dotsThese Tearsdots
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    (V1)
    Sometimes Iím just sittin by myself
    Itís late at night
    And house is quiet
    Suddenly the tears start rollin down
    With no warning
    With no reason
    And they just wonít go away

    (Chorus)
    Itís late at night
    And Iím so tired
    Iím lying here inside my bed
    My head wonít stop
    Itís spinnin round and round
    All the memories
    All the mistakes Iíve made
    These regret wonít stop, haunting me
    And These tears
    Ya these tears
    Wonít go away

    (V2)
    And I know Iím being foolish
    I know Iím being childish baby
    But I canít help but think
    If Iíd done it different
    Youíd still be here in my arms
    And these tear
    Would go away
    But,

    (Chorus)
    Itís late at night
    And Iím so tired
    Iím lying here inside my bed
    My head wonít stop
    Itís spinnin round and round
    All the memories
    All the mistakes Iíve made
    These regret wonít stop haunting me
    And These tears
    Ya these tears
    Wonít go away


    (V3)
    Pretty soon Iíll fall asleep
    And in the morning when I wake
    Itíll be so clear
    That without you Iím doing fine
    So fine
    And as I remember yesterday
    Iíll realize all my mistake
    Made me who I am today
    And all of these regrets
    Donít really haunt me much at all
    But tonight I feel like
    These tears
    Wonít go away

    Ya these tears
    Theyíll go away




    Submitted on 2006-08-21 03:04:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this. your words are so true tho after you relly look at something n actually think about it you realize that everything you went thru made you who u r n sometimes its not so great on how it ended but theres always someone else out there that will treat you better.def adding this to my favs <3ashley
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      your chorus is too long, it's a hook so it should be shorter. other than that, this was so-so, it needs music to really sound right, you know? i'm sure with music it's great. anyway, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this....i can really relate and it just seems so raw and straightforwrd...telling it as it is w/o holding back ya know??? Good job! Keep writing! -sam
    | Posted on 2006-09-11 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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