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    dots Submission Name: Claritydots

    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Hardened views on hardened lives
    thrive on the hands of time
    surely time brings wisdom, all throughout
    we'll learn it all, all down the line.

    we've tried it heavy, we've tried it true
    discrimination lies on both sides now
    acts of hate, prejudice and fear
    when will the meaning of justice be clear?

    because if time indeed yields wisdom
    why can 't we truly see
    all this pride, bringing us down and out
    leading us where we don't want to be

    and we know this from the trails we've led
    we know this from the blood we've shed
    walking backwards with hate in our hearts
    while we slowly tear ourselves apart

    we've tried it heavy, we've tried it true
    discrimination lies on all sides now
    words turned to actions, and actions to hurt
    which leaves me to wonder...
    if the meaning of justice will ever be clear.

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      Rock out with your cock out you dirty little boy, and bring me some chocolate milk while you're at it.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]
      Brent, I just gotta ask you a question for I feel you are a logical man and after reading this, I was just wondering. Do you think people get too caught up in that "rebel" concept?

    "Daddy did it this way, but I am gonna do it this way." Type of thought? "I need/want to be different." Blah, blah, blah...stuff?

    Now there are certain instances where the old thought is flawed and where it is just right on the button and should NEVER be changed or f*cked with. I think that is what this write means to me...no matter how you intended it to go, I see things in it which state that it takes a sharp mind to differentiate between the GOOD solid roots of old premices' and what premices' need to be revamped...and that now a days, too many people think EVERYTHING needs revamped when really the thought of needing to revamp EVERYTHING is the flaw. Anyway, I might just be rambling, but then again...I might just be typing the truth that no one else wishes to express. Thankfully you do...all I know is I got to get up and turn a fan on cuz I am starting to get warm.

    Thanks for sharing this write.
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think justice will ever be clear. Everyday, we are becoming more and more corrupted and also people are beginning to outsmart the laws of our society which what really is illegal made legal. i really don't know how to defend the legal system these days. Especially in the country where i am living now. Here it seems like, the more corrupted you make society, the better you are respected. There is a narcotics dealer here and he has more say in this country than the government themselves. So i really don't know what's going on with this world. I hate watching it fall apart but what can i do apart from not being in the crowd.

    Anyhow, nice touching piece which talks about this justice system and society basically as it has became. I liked it the way you have kept it a four lines stanza structure although i did notice an extra one in the last one. don't really know what it doing there but that don't matter. You had an idea and you've accomplished it pretty well. good work.

    take care....
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      What a piece of art you have here.
    It makes me think. It makes me really ponder what the meaning of justice is.
    I believe that justice will never be clear...mainly because it's different for everyone.
    It also comes from having "hardened lives" as you pointed out in the beginning of this piece.
    Experiences in your life will undoubtedly change you and sway your thinking one way or the other.
    It comes down to which battles are more important for you to fight for. Which ones do you want to stand up for. I wish that life didn't make people hold onto discrimination but it does. Discrimination is in everyone. I wish that wisdom really did prevail but really has the world stopped being a dangerous one ? Nope. There are still idiots out there.
    I don't know where I'm going with all of this but your piece really made me think about life and how everyone's perception of justice really is different.
    Good job.
    Take care,
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Ya know, this poem really gets me thinking. What is justice anyway? How is it enforced and is it what we think it is or is it something all together different? Perhaps what some believe to be right, really isnt right. This reminds me of how different the views of parents and their children are or even someone like me listening to older people talk about what they feel is right. We dont always agree or see things the same way. What makes them think that their beliefs are the right ones? Just because they are older it doesnt make their beliefs right or any more relevant than mine. Just like laws that make no sense. We have lots of them. Who decided on such things anyway? And as far as discrimination goes, it is everywhere. It is sad, but true. I guess it is up to the individual person to view things as they see fit, but as for our politicians, well, that is a whole other story that I wont go into here. This is very well written and expressed and really motivates the reader to think about all of this. Nice work. Oh, and by the way, just a question for you...did you bring that person their chocolate milk??hahahahaha!!

    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! I am liking this one. It's really fast paced but the explosion in it is so slow and mezmerizing. (spelled that wrong)

    You showed another side of yourself in this write...I mean.....I knew that this side of you existed but.....you don't show it as much as you should.

    we've tried it heavy, we've tried it true
    discrimination lies on both sides now
    acts of hate, prejudice and fear
    when will the meaning of justice be clear?

    What is Justice? I think that even the government has forgotten the definition.

    This was kind of like beat poetry.....believe it or not. It had that verbal punch to it.

    I loved it!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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