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To Arema

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 141
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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iight i wrote this for this guy who pissed me off not to long ago. Tell me what you think. I think there might be more to come..and why? because he called me a jump off. I mean i am called many things but shit i ain't a hoe. Anyways tell me what you think.

To Arema

check this..

you can call me many things
but not a jump off
i can't help it if i fucked him
till his dick got soft
everybody tellin me you mad
because i just fucked dude
but i know the real reason
was cause i ain't fucked you
but on the real i'm nice
but some mistake me
I'm so smart
but they think and say i'm naive
so you say that you love me
you tell me what you care
so why the fuck piss me off
and go there
i love you as a friend
i liked him, this you know
so why did you as my friend
get made and call me a hoe?
whatever i've been patient
so while you have your little fit
only expect these words out of my mouth
get over it

Submitted on 2006-08-21 15:09:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I am sorry, I din't like this at all. I saw no poetic merit in it whatsoever. I am glad you used this medium to vent instead of something more dramatic. You definatly have passion I can tell THAT from your writing. However direct it toward more colorful, poetic metaphorical writings. I think you can really do it. OH and by the way, I am sorry for this as well but I certainally do not think 15 years olds should be having sex. (just my opinion) Please consider abstaining, it's just too dangerous.

your friend
| Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
  i think ben's comment is pretty funny. u do seem to be having a good amount of sex. (i wish i got some when i was 15). yeah this was pretty much u [censored]ing at this dude. i didn't even think the rhyming was necessary.
| Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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