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    dots Submission Name: To Aremadots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 802
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    Bytes: 837



    Description:
       iight i wrote this for this guy who pissed me off not to long ago. Tell me what you think. I think there might be more to come..and why? because he called me a jump off. I mean i am called many things but shit i ain't a hoe. Anyways tell me what you think.


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    dotsTo Aremadots
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    check this..

    you can call me many things
    but not a jump off
    i can't help it if i fucked him
    till his dick got soft
    everybody tellin me you mad
    because i just fucked dude
    but i know the real reason
    was cause i ain't fucked you
    but on the real i'm nice
    but some mistake me
    I'm so smart
    but they think and say i'm naive
    so you say that you love me
    you tell me what you care
    so why the fuck piss me off
    and go there
    i love you as a friend
    i liked him, this you know
    so why did you as my friend
    get made and call me a hoe?
    whatever i've been patient
    so while you have your little fit
    only expect these words out of my mouth
    get over it




    Submitted on 2006-08-21 15:09:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am sorry, I din't like this at all. I saw no poetic merit in it whatsoever. I am glad you used this medium to vent instead of something more dramatic. You definatly have passion I can tell THAT from your writing. However direct it toward more colorful, poetic metaphorical writings. I think you can really do it. OH and by the way, I am sorry for this as well but I certainally do not think 15 years olds should be having sex. (just my opinion) Please consider abstaining, it's just too dangerous.

    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      i think ben's comment is pretty funny. u do seem to be having a good amount of sex. (i wish i got some when i was 15). yeah this was pretty much u [censored]ing at this dude. i didn't even think the rhyming was necessary.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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