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    dots Submission Name: Move On Dammit!dots

    Author: heartofxwinterx
    ASL Info:    14 f paradise
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 85/67/39
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 733
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       I kow its not all that well written, but the girl is really making me mad. Sorry about all the profanity, I don't usually use it in my poetry, but I was really p/o/ed.

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    dotsMove On Dammit!dots

    She loves you she hates me.
    Her truth we cannot see.
    Because of me she hates you.
    What the hell did I ever do?

    She calls you a fallen angel, and me a whore.
    Well, her shit I will not stand anymore.
    I didn't steal you away from her, I was there
    To wipe away the the tears she caused, and showed I did care.

    I don't know what her problem is, but she needs to get over it.
    I'm so fucking sick and tired of her shit.
    We've moved on now its her turn to do the same.
    I refuse to play her fucked up little game.

    She let me go, as far as I can tell.
    Now she needs to let you go and live in her hell.
    And stop giving the blame for her mistakes.
    Otherwise, the bitches neck, I'll break.

    Submitted on 2006-08-21 15:09:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ahhh all the drama that came with freshman year of highschool.this wasn't the best, but you got your point across. Hope that girl leaves you alone.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      the flow was a little off but it was a nice poem i got the point lol. Hope your drama goes away.

    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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