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    dots Submission Name: Scraped Knees & Band-Aidsdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    dotsScraped Knees & Band-Aidsdots
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    verse 1:

    i watch myself as i
    trip and stumble before
    crashing to the ground
    another fall has come
    oh but soon it will fade
    become a memory of yesterday


    chorus:

    you tripped me
    and i scraped my knees
    for a year i've sat
    watching them bleed
    tears fall from my eyes
    when i swore i wouldn't cry
    i've pulled the gravel from my skin
    but a band-aid won't hide the scar


    verse 2:

    i'm laughing at myself
    as i limp my way home
    telling the story
    of my foolishness
    and stupid little boys
    how could i ever let myself trust you


    verse 3:

    and i'm cursing you now
    cause i'm infected with
    your stupid disease
    falling for you again
    this time breaking my heart
    and whatever is left of me


    coda:

    you tripped me
    and i scraped my knees
    i've pulled the gravel from my skin
    but a band-aid won't hide the scar




    Submitted on 2006-08-21 18:04:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really good song where you bring others to the memories they have had at being a youth and how difficult it must be to be a child growing up in this crazy world now
    I always like the emotion you include in your writes you bring the reader deep inside you and show them exactly how you feel
    Excellent Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get A chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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