[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: I'm Gonna die youngdots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 952
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 934

       Perhaps a country song? Anyone out there know a band that wants to buy it? Or if it sucks.... never mind.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI'm Gonna die youngdots

    I spent too much on a doctor bill
    Sittin in her office, got news that wouldn't thrill
    Even the strongest person of heart and soul
    Would take this news and their blood would run cold

    I'm gonna die young
    Cause I lead a bad life
    I'm gonna die young
    I know it'll upset my wife

    I eat too much
    And smoke all day
    For a healthy lifestyle
    Thats not the way
    Don't wanna do what people say
    Good for you foods taste like hay

    I grew up eating anything I want
    Fried foods and sweets in any fancy restaurant
    Started smoking when I was a young teen
    Quit a few times and did drugs in between

    I'm gonna die young
    It'll be a short life
    I'm gonna die young
    Because of all the strife

    Submitted on 2006-08-21 18:46:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      That is a country song. I read it and then read it backwards and I felt young again. Yup, if you read it backwards, you'll get your health back and you and your wife will be happy. Like that Bob guy on the Enzyte commercials!

    This was chillingly frightening and funny at the same time...but thats probably cuz I'm gettin old too.

    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was good and if the corus was sung twice though It would make a soog song, well it may just have to be sung once, but the tune I was going with it sounded good twice. But resally overall, it isn;t all that bad for a song!
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Bond written by saartha
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Linger written by saartha
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Push written by JanePlane
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Wavelength written by saartha
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Fasade written by jackz
    written by Daniel Barlow




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]