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    dots Submission Name: one mic (verse 2)dots

    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       i wrote my own lyrics to a instrumental from a Nas song

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    dotsone mic (verse 2)dots

    All I need is one mic to amplify my voice, make it loud
    One wound for me to bleed on the crowd
    One slug to put in the head of society
    Watching the unworthy bastards that have everything that is denied to me
    A happy life with all it’s material wishes
    As I watch, hoping for the downfall of this tyranny, bitches
    Glitches fucking up my fantasy based reality
    The gate’s locked, I wonder who’ll be holding the keys after me
    Casting spells on the industry almost magically
    If you weren’t an atheist
    You’d say I performed the impossible miraculously
    I need one conflict to be resolved pacifistically
    Girls on their knees but they’re doing nothing religiously
    I need One Father, One Son, One Holy Spirit
    I wonder if anyone will understand my final wish when they hear it
    We’ve been forgiven too many times
    Humanity’s committed too many crimes
    It’s time to man, accept every consequence for your actions
    How do you expect to live when you’re addicted to fatal attractions
    You don’t, you’ve given up on hope completely
    It’s funny how I look up to those who are standing beneath me
    I’m trying to save y’all but who’s there to save me
    All I see is backstabbers waiting to erase and replace me
    You say tobacco is harmful, then light a cigarette
    You see a smoker
    What do I see?…..a hypocrite

    Submitted on 2006-08-21 22:58:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE. I cant even put into words. I know you got the idea from Nas, who is just about the only hip hop I listen too. But be careful with your titles, make sure you have your own creative edge and ideas. keep writing you.
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by Logic | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is even better then the first one. You dropped some lines in this one that had me sittin back like I was listenin to it on a track. Straight up.

    It helps when one can hear the beat that is behind the lyrics. I know Nas....so I know exactly how to make this flow in my head.

    I like your style more then others because you actually speak of something. You don't follow the hype and talk all this bullsheeit about hoes and money and grills and cars and whatever.....I've grown apart from hip hop because hip hop has gotten lost.

    You impress me a lot!

    Much love

    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well... I'm a fan of Nas. Ill emcee. I know that quoting other people sometimes helps describe what we're feeling when our own words can't measure up, but I've always had a problem with people copying rap lyrics. I've been writing rhymes for 17 years now, and never has it been someone elses. I'm not sure what you're going for here. Are you trying to get people into Nas, that might not normally be into him? Just agreeing with him? I mean, I saw you credit him, so I know you're not trying to pass his flows off as yours, but what did you post it for? I'm curious. Other than that, good taste in song.
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by Mr_Eff | [ Reply to This ]

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