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hard fate

Author: sickly
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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hard fate

the crazy prayers that don't exist
in the dirt, dust, and chaos that is flesh
from the scars that cripple and damage
darkness' secrets are sealed in oblivion
how do the normal feel?
being lonely is what i want
remotely glowing as fragile
no desperate diseases needed
hiding the heart for a reason to live
my hard luck was tough
burning down the past had to be
the times stood still
and then nothing was
except the fires' silent play
i wasn't out of my head over it
the promises echo long
friends were once strangers that cared
under the gun for the puppets
it's a rough enough road

Submitted on 2006-08-22 12:25:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is a really great poem, i somehow feel reated to it. i especially love the line 'hiding the heart for a reason to live "

xxxx great work! :) xxxx
| Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]

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