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    dots Submission Name: hard fatedots
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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotshard fatedots
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    the crazy prayers that don't exist
    in the dirt, dust, and chaos that is flesh
    from the scars that cripple and damage
    darkness' secrets are sealed in oblivion
    how do the normal feel?
    being lonely is what i want
    remotely glowing as fragile
    no desperate diseases needed
    hiding the heart for a reason to live
    my hard luck was tough
    burning down the past had to be
    the times stood still
    and then nothing was
    except the fires' silent play
    i wasn't out of my head over it
    the promises echo long
    friends were once strangers that cared
    under the gun for the puppets
    it's a rough enough road




    Submitted on 2006-08-22 12:25:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a really great poem, i somehow feel reated to it. i especially love the line 'hiding the heart for a reason to live "

    xxxx great work! :) xxxx
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]


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