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To Stay


Author: loveispain
ASL Info:    23/f/ME
Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283 /198 /51
Words: 208
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1055
Average Vote:    5.0000
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I just returned from California from seeing my boyfriend...and...I miss being there...I miss being with him..and everything in me just wishes I had stayed.


To Stay



Maybe I was wrong,
But it all felt so right.
Maybe I should have,
Held onto your hand,
As long as I could.
Felt every kiss,
Like it was the first.
Never released,
My grip on your heart.
As wrong as it was,
Insane as it seemed,
I should have found a way,
To make it work, to make it last,
To be there forever,
To stay.

I hold in the tears.
I don't let them fall.
But I need to cry,
I need to hurt,
I need to feel,
All of this pain,
To heal, to forgive, to move on.
Not to forget,
But to find that place,
Where I can be safe,
From the memories,
Of us.

Can't be there now,
Where everything is right,
Where everything is real.
The only place I don't have to feel,
All of this pain and all of this grief.
I'd do anything,
I'd follow the path, break down the walls,
To find a way, to get where you are.
As wrong as it was,
Insane as it seemed,
I should have found a way,
To make it work, to make it last,
To be there forever,
To stay.








Submitted on 2006-08-22 23:08:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There is nothing much I can say about this piece...it is simply, brilliant. I know that feeling all to well, that sometimes you wish you could have just changed one aspect of your relationship with someone and somehow it would have worked out better, but we all move on, and to have it end sooner is better then it never ending at all and you realizing how wrong it was, right? well great write, dont thing there is anything i would change to improve it...
| Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you miss this guy? I may be wrong? LOL
Anyway great write!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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