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    dots Submission Name: Statesmandots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Perhaps my view of the political machine in general is very dark. I am fairly conservative, by the way. Ah, well...


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    dotsStatesmandots
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    I'm a statesman
    I'm a state statesman
    I'm a statesman.
    I'm a real gone guy
    with some voodoo style
    I'm a statesman.

    I tease infoholics
    like a toreador,
    ship dreams to oblivion
    on distant shores,
    stir violent mobs
    like sweet bitches
    and whores;
    I am a statesman.

    Someone should really love me
    before the point is moot
    they should be prancing to my mantra
    in a tailored suit

    I'm a statesman
    I'm a state statesman
    I'm a statesman.
    Well I'm Likud cool
    I'm a shining jewel
    I'm a statesman.

    Each nuclear assumption
    is a blistering wail,
    disappointment and doubt
    are swftly beaten and jailed,
    your Eden may be lovely
    mine is razor and nails;
    I am a statesman.




    Submitted on 2006-08-23 00:01:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this....there was such a mixture of seriousness and humor in it. I was found with an emotional rollercoaster on this one.

    I think that you showed some definite uniqueness in this one. Do you really want to be a statesman? I am not sure if this is something for you hun....but....hey.....I'll vote for you!

    Not many can take such a subject and turn it into such a piece of art. I see that you did show a different more..."nonconservative" side of yourself and I truly commend that. When one can use whatever language they have in mind with no fear of reaction from the crowd....I think that adds a lot to the piece itself.

    *stands and claps*

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Bill,

    First let me just say that I'm shocked to see the "B" word coming from your pen (or keyboard or whatever)! But it's a good kind of shock.

    I had to laugh when I read this because it reminds me soooo much of a song/cheer that I teach my second graders when they are memorizing pronouns. ("Were' the Pronouns! We're the Pro's! We're the Pronouns! Let's go! etc., etc.") I could make up some little hand clapping rhythms to go along with your poem if you like! Maybe get some cheerleaders to choreograph some dance moves?

    Could this possibly be a statesman who's about to throw his hat in the ring for the Presidential election?

    I enjoyed reading it. As Johnny Carson always used to say, FUNNY STUFF!

    Annie

    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is rather light compared to your usual writes. I have to say I like it though. Just recently we see that Mel Gibson and Tom Cruise are awash in the world of impending failure. And I learned from my studies that once the success subsides, the star goes out like a light. So I have to take the advice of the Tao te Ching and feel that to be an ember is to be eternal.

    Underneath all this I see ego as detrimental and proselytizing (it seems to convey the idea quite well) as even worse. I think it's funny how this repeats, as though one is cheerleading for the self.
    And it works like mockery in terms of how government really is right now. If I were an artist, I think I'd be doing political cartoons, I have these visions, you understand..

    thanks for sharing your visions with us!
    remember, ember,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, heh, heh...ahhhhh...so nice to read a well thought out and written poem with hints of comedy and puns so delicately intertwined, yet kicks you square in the teeth.

    You definately put the reader into a trance and that is what a good statesman does. Magicians have slight of hand, statesmen have slight of smiles.


    Nice one Bill. Made me smile!
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yes...

    You know, the Philippines, according to a lot, probably 20 - 30 surveys, is one of the most corrupt countries in this world. So I more or less get the frustration.

    I once interviewed this Mayor and he is so full of BS.

    By the way, I don't think I've ever read a piece like this from you before. No, I don't think it's bad. It possess that somewhat robotic characteristic, or perhaps formula-ish assortment of safe smiles and pro-masa remarks, that most politician have.

    I do, however, think that this piece would be better read aloud.

    But still... good write.
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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