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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 686
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    You think you know.
    The world like the back of your hand.
    When you'er in love.
    You take everything for nothing.
    And you always think it will end...

    Thats when you're not in love.
    When you're not in love-
    You think it's going to end if you say something wrong.


    I thought it was going to end.
    If I said something wrong.





    Submitted on 2006-08-23 03:38:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thought it was awkwardly voiced, i know there was probably alot of emotion behind this and i think you're doing yourself injustice to give it this type of a spotlight.
    it's not horrible, just could be much better, some of the language used to construct the sentences is just too plain on occasions. i think a revision of this would be a good idea.
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by ink_the_blood | [ Reply to This ]


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