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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       I really don't know where this came from. I was just lounging on my porch and started writing. I don't know whats wrong with me, but I can't seem to end this like I want to. Nothing sounds right to me... Any suggestions would be great.

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    Stars smile down,
    To calm my mind.
    The Sun reveals,
    What I can't find.

    The moon leads me,
    To the path ahead.
    Shooting stars,
    Relieve my dread.

    The birds sing,
    To make me dance.
    Roses blossom,
    And flaunt romance.

    It rains outside,
    To wash away hate.
    Clouds float overhead,
    The wind sedates.

    Oh, Mother Nature,
    How I love you so,
    To keep me so happy,
    As your beauty unfolds.

    Submitted on 2006-08-23 08:41:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice poem. Everyone has to have something to take their mind away, if even just for awhile. More time than not, people find this escape in nature, and alot of times, as you have show here, the rain. Nature can be very cleanising, if you want it to be, it's all a matter of how hard you're willing to try, and how much you really want it.
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Vampirism | [ Reply to This ]

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