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    dots Submission Name: Baptizeddots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I keep the shower on all night.
    It cries for me watching me fight.
    The cold water trickles down.
    My sorrows drowning out the sound.
    I step under the shower tide.
    Where I feel the need to no longer hide.
    Tears streaming down my face.
    Water gleaming off my body in every place.
    Why canít love just be simple?
    I wonder while I enter my drenched temple.
    Absorbing everything into my will.
    Water in me begins to fill.
    Love scythes my heart and reaps.
    Alone under the water I continue to weep.
    I am an emotional sea.
    Feelings raging in me internally.
    Water beading on my lids.
    Underneath tears I forbid.
    My mindís enigma abyss.
    Iím trapped within my loneliness.
    Iím filled up again and washing away my sin.
    Iím ready to move on Iím a new man within.

    Submitted on 2004-01-26 16:54:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You sure spilled the emotion on this one. Lovely.
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]

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