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    dots Submission Name: Who Am I REALLYdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 682
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       Feelings felt but some are just left unsaid.. and its best that way at times... but at what time do we drawl the line?


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    dotsWho Am I REALLYdots
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    I wake up to a house-hold so unorganized
    I grab my clothes and off to the shower I go
    As the warm water heavily beats down onto my body..
    My mind takes me back
    I re-live what I so long to forget
    But as for my mind and body says its simply not possible!
    For, can't you see?
    I am now part of this nasty cycle
    My actions... my reactions I will always judge in the worst way.
    Not wanting to become him
    Not wanting those actions to take me over...
    As I dry myself off
    I drop the towel and in suspense
    I stair... I glare at this figure in the mirror
    And I ask myself
    What have I become?
    Who am I really?
    And tears accumulate in my eyes
    One by one they begin to fall
    I realize... I do not know who I am
    I do not recognize this person that stands before me
    Although it is me...
    I cannot tell
    Can't you see?
    I've lost myself
    Within the depths of all thatís happened
    I've lost myself
    In the past I have lived
    I've lost myself
    In all that may happen.. but hasn't happened yet!
    So I wipe these rain drop tears off this face of mine
    And I head off to school...
    Only knowing that the outcome of this day will simply be depressing
    And it will hold a long wrestles night...
    But my expectations do not exists...
    So this long night that awaits me...
    Can't not.. and dose not surprise me




    Submitted on 2006-08-23 15:10:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very intense poem, I have had a similar experience I will have to post the poem I wrote about it, it sucks to look in the mirror and not recognize the face looking back at you, I know how it feels first hand and I found it to be a rather disturbing experience, I still have a hard time looking in the mirror afraid of what I might see, I will post "The Mirror Man" for you to read, I think you might like to read that one.
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      Intense and painful..inspiring. To truley look at oneself and know the true person has left them is spiritual. To gain that person back is a journey. It reminds me of myself. I enjoyed this..thanks.
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by jbiz | [ Reply to This ]


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