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    dots Submission Name: lost boydots
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    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 813
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    Bytes: 650



    Description:
       a lost boy with no cause in life


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    dotslost boydots
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    cut the flesh
    lick the blade
    examine the blood for a different shade

    feeling real
    isnít why
    I do this to my self
    or why I cry

    lost with out reason
    happy with the thought of treason
    full of sin
    we just cant win

    cut deeper
    to see the reaper
    feeling better as my arm gets wetter

    soak my floors
    while I fight my wars
    with out a cause
    I knew my flaws

    went to far
    wasnít the only one left with scars
    sorry that this is the end
    in life some heart just cant mend




    Submitted on 2006-08-23 15:54:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      'cut the flesh
    lick the blade
    examine the blood for a different shade'

    OMG how people cant open their mind to a simple out of box thought

    blood = one coulor
    to examine = taking a closer look
    taking a closer look = fasination
    fasination= curiosity

    see where this is going? [censored]
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]
      This seems a little forced in places. Plus it has sentences that sound like they are fragments from the way you wrote this. I write my poetry the exact same why, but I don't cut off sentences like that.

    Not to be mean but what does
    "examing the blood for a different shade"
    mean? It makes no sense at all. How are you going to examine it from a differant shade?

    Kara
    | Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad. Terribly sad. It is always sad to me when I read a suicide poem, even my own! Just that the world feels as if there is no way out breaks my heart. Even worse then it already is. If you ever wanna talk or just vent! I'm a PM away!


    Hey all, I'm just trying to get my reciprocation up. I'm down in the -'s pretty far. So, don't feel the need to comment on my work. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things at Elite. Think of it as a favor from me to you! Thanks for the read!
    <3BCute
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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