This seems a little forced in places. Plus it has sentences that sound like they are fragments from the way you wrote this. I write my poetry the exact same why, but I don't cut off sentences like that.
Not to be mean but what does "examing the blood for a different shade" mean? It makes no sense at all. How are you going to examine it from a differant shade?
Sad. Terribly sad. It is always sad to me when I read a suicide poem, even my own! Just that the world feels as if there is no way out breaks my heart. Even worse then it already is. If you ever wanna talk or just vent! I'm a PM away!
Hey all, I'm just trying to get my reciprocation up. I'm down in the -'s pretty far. So, don't feel the need to comment on my work. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things at Elite. Think of it as a favor from me to you! Thanks for the read! <3BCute