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    dots Submission Name: dead,yetalivedots
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    Author: dead,yetalive
    ASL Info:    19,female, mia FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 100/104/28
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    I am dead and yet alive
    I am a constantly changing person
    I strive for the best in spirituality
    And the kindest in smart guys

    I'm a never ending giggler
    Who can't get enough of fire
    I long for children of my own
    And live for God and God alone

    I worry that I won't be as good
    However I know God will help day through day
    I pretend that I have everything I ever wanted
    And dream of things that have really happened

    I cry only when my mother's memory's too near
    I long for death when I cry for my dear
    When death is close I turn my face
    And try to walk with a calmer pace

    I'm paranoid hieghts will be the death of me
    I'm a tolerant person but beware, my eyes are key
    I feel the heat of hell when I sin
    And pray I find the peace within




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      Although no one has noticed, this write was very bold and courageous. On a site full of sad stories and hard times You were bold enough express your happiness and faith in God, and for that I really am impress, infact this is probably the first christian write I have encountered on here and to add it happens to be wonderful. It's almost like another side to poetry, an happier side.

    great write
    llcollins
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is just overall about you, and how you feel about the days passing in your life spiritually, emotionally and physically. It is, in my opinion, wonderfully written. THis is excellent and makes me want to read more of the stuff that you have written, which I will do at a later date. Excellent write.
    ~CAotic~
    | Posted on 2006-10-14 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      religion? that person below me is wrong, this is about Christianalty and battles with yourself.
    Great poem here. A sinner always creeps within our souls and like the Bible talks about, if you rid the spirit that made you bad, seven more shall enter if you do not be careful lol So, tell your friends to never get you mad lol and being honest, your mother would be happy for you at this moment. she is happier now in Heaven then anyother spot on earth. Her and jesus are sipping tea and talking about plans for the new Heaven and earth right now, Shouting in Glory " It is almost time for everyone to rejoyce!!" love you daughter always
    peace and continue the sucess and the blessings you bringing
    | Posted on 2006-08-26 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
      personally i think that this almost fits under religeon. i mean, i think it is great when people find thier faith helps them day in, day out to help them become better people. im not really a god person. i have a diferent faith, that relies on the nature of my suroundings.
    the first two stanza's were great, and really began to describe you, but the last three began to less and less. that is my personal finding in this piece, but thats because i am quite analytical, and perhaps bias against religeon.
    hope this hasnt upset you in any way.
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]


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