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    dots Submission Name: Random Freestylesdots

    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 439
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1285
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       I wrote these over the past week or two. THey are random and strictly fictional. Meant to pass time.

    Feedback is appreciated....

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    dotsRandom Freestylesdots

    Feathered-wings but I still have tethered-dreams, endeavors-n-schemes but I will write a best-seller, inspite of why I write it seems, but this is my test-helper, to being like and know my worth, and to put forth my efforts onto conquests of compeller heights as high as stellar distance when im on the mic, I dispel words for admittance of my rights, n my will to abide-by, ride-high and fight or go the distance like “shes all alone in a time of need”, lack of persistence to tell-her im bringin her home wit weed, similar outlooks but different speech,

    My Liquid fire burns wit blue heat
    in every turn I see the devils teeth
    To raise my desire to slew the weak
    they urn to reach my level but cant handle the beat

    I’m Grippin ya neck wit razors locked to grasp ya apple
    You cant outlast my grapple, I shock ya worst then a Tazer gun with a broken handle

    I Study demonic harmonics, get myself ready to arm myself and shift like tectonics
    Release my gift so swift as I squeeze techs you think I was sonic

    Unbound laws of reality I speak profound and heal the calamity
    of horror filled like murder to ya family
    rape so sadistic noone ever heard of ya except when they speak tragedy
    Passively ya sister reacted to me lickin her tits,
    she said faster please then I burned her lips like overcooked grits

    Thoughts come to hinder-life
    negative sins spawn to render-strife
    I never give up or surrender-the night, on ESPN or against any men
    im always a contender-to fight, my intro to the ring, suspends wit me on the mic
    joustin or rough housing I get in ya bitches ass
    She arousing from my tough mouthing she gonna need stitches in her ass
    I feed her my semen while im holdin a cloaked dagger,
    I got her this demon that’s gonna choke and gag-her,
    make her elope so grab-her, she ‘fienden’ to keep screamin like I was her coke-adapter,
    cuz I soak-her wit my load and coat-her -faster
    wit white cum you could call this hoe-casper
    I got the devils-eyes at a revel-size, supporting sodomy cuz I fuck the civilized,
    society haunted by me and my metal-disguise
    becuz I pump fluids like I had a pedal-rise,
    Im a level-headed guy who sees through the lies, im free-to-get-high-
    cuz I walk paths that never break-flood
    I be true to try caulk wraths of fate becuz I intake-blood
    rather then overflow wit hate-snubbed

    Submitted on 2006-08-24 03:15:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can't even begin to tell you how many lost thoughts that I have. That's what I call my freestyles that never make it to completion.

    You have a lot of great starts here. I think that maybe if you put your mind into it 100 you could find a way to combine all your rants.

    You just have to get in that zone again. You'll get it though.

    Big ups.

    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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