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    dots Submission Name: Ink Is Thy Blood, Paper Is Thy Willdots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       make your own way in life, don't follow anybody.


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    dotsInk Is Thy Blood, Paper Is Thy Willdots
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    If your gonna read this keep a open mind....


    I wanna know,
    If I walk on water would you love me?
    If I split the sea would you follow me?
    If I said we were gonna descend to the
    Depths of the abyss, and rise with the
    Wings of life, or from them gallows of
    Sorrow, we will rise with the flame of
    Love, if I said I could unlock the forbidden
    Places of your mind, Break this spiral
    Of being asleep but with open eyes, would
    You trust me has we walk into the valley
    Of the shadow of death, we shall fear no
    Evil, for with this pen, ink is thy blood,
    Paper is thy will, for these feelings will
    Be known, these feelings will never be
    Broken apart, I will not die with your
    Hand wrapped around my heart for you
    To squeeze, and tear my life apart
    Piece after piece fell to the floors as we
    Reminisce, day after day the way we had
    To coexist with the fact that we werent
    Good enough, life for us just wasnt intact,
    As with try to walk hand in hand, as we try
    Follow these footprints, afraid to fall of this
    Path, Today we make in known, we wont
    follow any tracks, we will make our own.




    Submitted on 2006-08-24 11:37:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this made me think about it for a moment. normally i would have said something about the unusual line breakage here, but i feel it makes you go back and re-read much of it, causing you to absorb much more of it. I love the biblical inferences here. :) have a beautiful day!!
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by prettygrnEyes | [ Reply to This ]


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