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    dots Submission Name: making us knowndots

    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 687
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 654

       its cheesy, but it all roled out, and i enjoyed writting this one, its short but i like it.

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    dotsmaking us knowndots

    we were there as kids/
    best friends, who held hands/
    8 years on we are now making love/
    and rolling in the sand/
    tranced and blown away/
    by how much we have grown/
    together we dived in/
    into the unknown/
    i always trusted you/
    u know ur my best friend/
    nothing can tear us apart/
    we are fused to the end/
    you have my loyalty/
    and heart for life/
    if anything should happen to us/
    we will pay the full price/
    from playing kiss chace/
    to making a home/
    we have delved in deep/
    making us known.

    Submitted on 2006-08-24 13:21:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww, how cute n sweet!!! too bad it doesn't work with everyone in this world...
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
      I like a poem with lovers that have a history.
    But I think your beautiful words r undone when u r taking short cuts n ur work.
    It makes me feel like you wrote this in a hurry.
    Well I guess I am old and slow.
    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      this remimded me of chalk hopscotch lines on the sidewalk, and lemonheads. young love is often the truest and deepest love, when you have known that person for so long.... that they just seem to become a part of you. :)
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by prettygrnEyes | [ Reply to This ]

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