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    dots Submission Name: Del Mardots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 894
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 823



    Description:
       I just returned from a road trip to South of the Border Mexico and after a long day of driving, dusty and hot, I pulled up to the beach, popped a cold Tecate and made angels in the sand...this was by the light of my Cuban cigar, beer in hand, feet in sand...Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsDel Mardots
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    The road 2 Mexico
    is paved with
    deep thought
    & wonder
    Of infinite I fathom
    in 1-ness
    I drive
    and ponder
    Where I'm going and
    why I am
    so willing
    to grab the wave
    of divine Love
    no ceiling
    But of myself
    Above of myself
    and the peace
    rolls in
    to nothing or
    no need of
    man's sin
    and the laughter
    was all I
    needed 2 hear
    to take away
    all of life's
    anxiety & fear
    Love is indeed
    a far-away
    beach of Life
    Filled with Love
    yet showing
    pain & strife
    But just as
    I dreamt it
    so close 2 me
    The help of
    a friend and
    I'm allowed to B




    Submitted on 2004-05-20 16:16:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'm gonna guess you didn't just go to Mexico for spring break like most of us. and unlike the most of us(seemingly) you offer an alturistic view point creating both soundness in solitude and provoking tranquility. Oh, and Del Mar kicks ass, my Aunt used to live there, I live like 20-40 min. away(pending traffic)
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      well it was just about the coolest thing to read...the flow well the way it read was like perfect i loved the capitalaztaion and nummbers its really cool i liked the line about needing to hear laughter it got me thinking about alot of stuff...

    Flow* 9/10
    orginality 9/10
    cool words(ing) 9/10
    creativity 10/10
    rymes 8/10
    overall 9.4/10

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, you have a beautiful verse here and have come up with an original format for it, at least I'm not familiar with poets who use numerals and symbols in their work. I also like the monolithic structure. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]


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