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    dots Submission Name: one mic (verse 3)dots

    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       last verse. i used to think this was the shit and now i think it's pretty awful

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    dotsone mic (verse 3)dots

    Itís time to put this shit in proportion
    Too many dead kids, we donít need no abortions
    Itíll be sad if Christ came again only to be sucked out the womb
    Our Savior with a trash can as a tomb
    You know that the end is starting to loom
    The rational flee their destruction, the radicals are facing their doom
    Looking death in the eye
    People will die no matter how hard I try
    Because killers are still in supply
    Brothers getting high and just let the world pass em by
    Who am I?
    I have no identity
    Iím useless if there are no more people to depend on me
    Not ready to face all my enemies
    All I need is one pain
    The pain of life, death, and sacrifice
    Our bloodís hot, why are our hearts cold as ice?
    Iím sorry, thatís three pains, I was mistaken
    How do you make someone pay when itís their own life that theyíve taken?
    I apologize for all my transgressions
    Prophets prophesize the coming of the man with Godís greatest blessing
    I need one rock to cling to when Iím stuck in the rapids
    I need one salvation but Iím unable to grab it
    I donít need a car when Iím already lost in the traffic
    I need one girl that I know will always be faithful
    I wish international conflicts didnít have to be racial
    All I need is one life, a life of my own
    I need kids to die far after theyíre grown
    I need my people to move out of the gutter
    I need coppas to think before they murder a brotha
    I need the truth to come out from under the covers
    Iíll give you my most solemn vow
    Like Nas said before me, the time is now
    Most choose to give up on life but some fight
    Iíll welcome the darkness if youíll just gibe me that one mic

    Submitted on 2006-08-24 21:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this one flowed nicely a bit to speritial for me though...still battleing my own belifes....anyway nicely done.

    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      it was rocky at the begining but the end was good. I liked the first two lines and then the last eleven.And i know all the other hiphop heads just dropped of the face of the earth.

    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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